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Marcello Iori's avatar

The Battle of the Bulge parallel is the best move in the chapter... drunk logic that's also completely coherent character logic. Dane has spent the whole story treating men like territory to take, so of course she narrates herself into a tank when the strategy fails. What makes her work as a character is that the vulnerability is always there just under the surface. The father who doesn't call back lands harder than the job loss. That detail does a lot of.

Stories Sown With Hope's avatar

Dane seems unable to make a good decision, even when her life depends upon it.

By the time I reached the fiery bus/cabin explosion scene, I was reading at a speed that might have exploded itself. I can picture it all.

Kathy Stout's avatar

That was the most exciting episode yet! I don’t know whether to call Dane sad or unhinged. I am starting to pity her. And we don’t know if she even survived the explosion. Oh, wait… we will find out in two more weeks!

Unacceptable Bob's avatar

A Great Dane and her battle scars.

Sally Jupe's avatar

I just love how you conjure images for me Will because I read as if I see a movie or photographs etc. You describe everything so well and yet leave room for me to add more and this chapter was a great example of that with the tension building through so many different ways around who Dane really is, or maybe now, was! And the differing emotions we can feel for her. What a cliffhanger! Difficult to build really when the given premise or town etc is so small, with limited opportunities to build a story around other than from your imagination. Where will you take us now I wonder?

Carolyn Preston's avatar

OMG now that was a chapter!

Jane Hiatt's avatar

Well for sure I didn’t see that coming.

Ellie Johnson Searle's avatar

Still loving the writing. I'm not sure we've heard the last of Dane. Is she really toast 🤔 or did she manage to get out of the bus in time?

Anne Arthur's avatar

Wow, that was a surprising chapter. Ms. Dane is even crazier than I thought.

Liz Gauffreau's avatar

Whoa! That was a dramatic end to the scene, hopefully the end of the Dane, too.

Stephanie Foster's avatar

Wow, you sure finished Dane off! Surprising

Angela L Hoy's avatar

Wow, I wasn’t expecting this twist!! Really good writing. 👏🏻

Nancy E. Holroyd, RN's avatar

Well, now. That was an explosive ending. Dane doesn't make the best decisions and getting rather weary of her...

Kyle Fisk's avatar

Oh, Dane. 😞 I do feel sorry for her. So many fires in this story!

Susie Anderson's avatar

Well, what a surprise!

BEFRIENDING LIFE's avatar

Fire once again enters their stories! I also have pity for Dane; she shows signs of early sexual abuse. But mostly I'm worried about Will's cabin/ the Love Nest. Thanks for an exciting new episode! nora ann